应对 When people make decisions of buying something, many of them make their
decisions based on what they see in advertisements. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? 这个题目。 学生写了下面这个句子: You may find a better solution to an aged problem by watching
advertisements. *个问题,应该是很明显大家发现的:an aged
problem?我明白意图,“老”问题又不想用old,但是用aged还不如用old了。。。 * 第二个问题:直呼读者“You”,不妥。 *
第三个问题:除非前后的句子搭建了语境(于是,比较关系中需要的两个主体明确了),不然,我们要避免中文口语习惯里的滥用比较级。不然,我们的读者其实并不知道究竟怎么得出的better,比什么better呢? 看下面 教师修改后的句子: A viewer of advertisements may be inspired and come up with good ideas to
solve a problem that has long been bothering. *好像很难解释究竟好在哪里,但是读起来就顺畅许多,意思也明确。 * 尤其需要讲的是,回应原句中的an aged problem,其实是 a problem that has long been
bothering。注意,long在此处是副词,放在have和done/been之间。 * 避免了by doing something这个僵硬的表达方式,而是用“广告观众”作主语。 小总结: * 定语从句可以解决大家找不到合适的形容词的困扰。 * 主语的选择其实是句子构造的重要技巧(之一)。
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